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SHINOBI: The RPG - New Game

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Fulcon, Jun 17, 2020.

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  1. Galacticplumber

    Galacticplumber Know what you're doing yet?

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    I would go even further than understandable. He had no one to teach social graces, and thus has none.

    He has no attention, and thus does what all younglings are evolved to do in that situation.

    There is another believable way I see his early life varying by personality. He COULD'VE been a book hermit, on the grounds that books don't judge, belittle, or ignore him. He'd have been screwed up still, but in a different way.

    Human beings don't come out of that situation well, and the fact he was only as neurotic as he was is a testament to his optimistic outlook and mental fortitude.
     
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  2. Fulcon

    Fulcon Wim Hoff Method Initiate

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    I have no argument, this is right. All this means are that Naruto's flaws make sense and I hope I'm doing them justice. :)
     
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  3. Galacticplumber

    Galacticplumber Know what you're doing yet?

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    A version of them is doing well yes. I just wanted to make clear why the fandom is so gentle on him. They have a viewpoint similar to that, and it doesn't come across due a lack of nuance either in writing, or understanding.

    This is not to say it's never done poorly. Sometimes you get edgelord omni-competent badass loners who hate most everyone and swear a lot. This is over correction in several areas at once. This happens because people don't realize you can't just turn several dials to eleven completely different from human experience, and get someone that hooks attention in a positive manner.
     
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  4. Graeme404

    Graeme404 Getting out there.

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    Also, Patreon has a chance of going out of business soon
     
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  5. Nekraa

    Nekraa Nekraa Moderator

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    This is not topical to this thread, knock it off.
     
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  6. Seij

    Seij Conveniently Generic Title

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    Yus! New chapter! Life being as stressful as it is, it's great to get a breather and see your favourite fanfiction updated. I especially liked the introspection about how it was possible that Daisuke took care of two ROOT nins and the power of his hyper-specialisation. I wondered it myself and so it's great to see self-awareness of that in Daisuke.

    I also liked Daisuke not being as gentle on Naruto. There are too many fics that put him on a pedestal. I'm glad you're not shy in talking about his flaws. Like Daisuke, he's not perfect and it's amazing to see that developing well, both Daisuke and Naruto.

    I'm glad you made the decision to demonetise, not because for demonetisation's sake, but for your own personal grievances of it. People talk a lot about the most efficient, most rewarding path, but never about the most consistent path. If not having the pressure of money on the line is a good thing for you, then pursue that. I fully support it.
     
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  7. Fulcon

    Fulcon Wim Hoff Method Initiate

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    I'm so glad you're enjoying this chapter. It makes me happy that so many people are tuning into this rewrite. :D

    Introspection is good, especially when it takes care of a nagging thought in the back of a readers skull.

    Thank you! It bothers me that people try to canonize Naruto. I mean, he has extremely good reasons to be the way he is, but that doesn't mean his flaws don't matter; they do. They make him Naruto.

    If you want to benefit society and for that relationship to be mutually beneficial, you need terms that you're happy with. Thank you for your support you wonderful human being.

    Have a cookie.
     
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  8. TorextheDragon

    TorextheDragon Getting sticky.

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    Ohhhh yesssssss. The OP protagonist juices are flowing. Another great chapter. Can't wait for more.
     
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  9. DIKR1229

    DIKR1229 Your first time is always over so quickly, isn't it?

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    I love the concept of the originals and your passion to remake the first one. Kudos to you, very few make the attempt to be better or keep trying to.

    Indeed, Kudos™ to you.
    I had just noticed the great variety of writing tools over here in QQ.

    It took a long time but his passion for writing came back, stronger than ever, and with the power of Maito Guy on his side.
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    Holly hell, people can throw dices here! I did not even know it was possible until I saw that button. YES!
     
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  10. alanek

    alanek Getting sticky.

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    Just found this;
    I can say you definitely did the nevermore section better than the first time around, and I'm interested to see how the major arcs change from before.



    Re deleting patreon/no money for fanfiction.
    Whenever you get around to starting said work, patreon does actually have a way to make it charge per update instead of per month, with people being able to set a limit on how much can be drawn per month.
    Granted, my only experience with this was for "this bites" and their 50k chapters, but it's an option available to you.

    No rush feeling of "they're paying me for nothing"; I don't know if that will help or not.

    Be warned of xianxia. There are a decent amount of good stories, even great ones. There are *many* bad ones. Every time you try one it is like clicking on a truly random fic on fanfiction.net.
     
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  11. aaaaaaaaahhhhhhh

    aaaaaaaaahhhhhhh Know what you're doing yet?

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    I hope havent already said something like this but I’m really enjoying this story. I would feel bad saying that it’s better than the 1st version since I also really enjoyed that story and had a ton of fun reading it. The crippling social charism made for a very interesting disability and contributed to the plot in an novel way. No one in the real world is perfect it was nice to read how the MC was able to overcome his affliction. Now in this story, our protagonist won’t be able to hide behind his low charism and I imagine he might have to face some things a bit earlier :)

    Good luck! Sorry, it’s late for me, I hope what I wrote makes some sense!
     
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  12. Twistedmind

    Twistedmind Making the rounds.

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    I Love this. I Hope that there is A new chapter soon.
     
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  13. Raphaim

    Raphaim Your first time is always over so quickly, isn't it?

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    That Muppet treasure island reference tho.
     
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  14. Fulcon

    Fulcon Wim Hoff Method Initiate

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    Soonish. Next chapter is going to be a bit of a montage, at least that's what the plan is, simply to show how Daisuke grows before Organ Trail starts up.

    Quote it for me...because I remember making it, but don't remember exactly what I wrote. XD
     
  15. Raphaim

    Raphaim Your first time is always over so quickly, isn't it?

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    This one
     
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  16. Fulcon

    Fulcon Wim Hoff Method Initiate

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    Ah yeah.

    Have a plate of cookies. :D
     
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  17. Raphaim

    Raphaim Your first time is always over so quickly, isn't it?

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    AW SWEET COOKIES!!!!
     
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