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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Old Knife

    Old Knife Know what you're doing yet?

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    He's like a nicer Vril Drox.
    I bet the offer to fix his "problem" will be more complicated than first glance.
     
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  2. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    "And that little ring can do all this work?"

    "Yes. It contains an artifical mind, capable of processing...well, every single word written by elves ever every second"

    "That seems an...unwise...use of magic"

    "It's not magic, per se, and it's creators were very careful not to give it agency, a will of it's own. It is a tool entirely under my control"

    "...Oh"
     
  3. Mr Zoat

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    Thank you, corrected.
    Yes, which they sited over the Inland Sea because that way it wouldn't wreck an entire province.
    That's a post-me retcon that I'm not using, because it makes no sense.
    Actually, Teclis has a pretty decent sense of humour. Not that the Orange Lantern knows that.
    Yes, the courier was an elf. Which goes some way to explaining why they didn't prioritise it.

    Altdorf is on a major river, so while river pirates are a possibility orcs were unlikley. Once you get to the coast it's a straight shot to across the sea to Ulthuan.
    Not true, sir! It's also full of giants.
    Unfortunately, the Orange Lantern has no idea who Archaon is. Arbaal the Undefeated and Egrimm van Horstmann on the other hand had better watch out.
    I've tried to find the introduction story for the Hot Pot. No luck. As far as I remember the highlight was melting three trolls after a small force got through to the baggade train.
    For certain websites it's still forbidden to encourage it.
    I'm only aware of two canonical catwomen in Warhammer.
     
  4. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 I trust you know where the happy button is?

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  5. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    I know, a lot of them do that now and I've got no idea why. They worked when I created them. I'll fix it when I have a moment.
     
  6. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Found an old error in Liberticide part 4.
    There are two quotation marks at the end.
     
  7. SaltyWaffles

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    This. Paul showed wisdom in wanting to check with the actual experts before even getting attached to the plan, let alone putting any of it into action. He then immediately accepted the judgment of said experts without showing any sign of being upset or offended.

    To asur archmages, that is very reassuring—it means that Paul is someone with the capability to change the world while also having the good sense to know that he needs to depend on the experts to determine what major changes are actually good ideas.
     
  8. Mr Zoat

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  9. LZB1285

    LZB1285 Getting out there.

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  10. Vaermina

    Vaermina Versed in the lewd.

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    The funny thing with Paul is him assuming he can actually keep secrets from groups that can see the future.
     
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  11. DrThoth

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    Disclaimer: I have fairly limited knowledge of Warhammer Fantasy, but I haven't seen Zoat answer this himself; I can see why Teclis would want to meet with Paul, but not why they mustered an entire dragonship for it, since those things are apparently irreplaceable and dedicated solely to war, which feels a bit premature when they haven't even met Paul and gotten a clearer sense of the strategy, even if they already know the gist.
     
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  12. Mr Zoat

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    Because information on Ulthuanian birth rates is really sensitive. It impacts not just their ability to survive invasions but to maintain their farming and industry, and keep up the defence of their colonial possessions. The various places Teclis was able to persuade to share that information weren't exactly eager to do so, and even the Dark Elves don't have that level of detail assembled in one place.

    It also requires huge amounts of space to hold enough records to cover the subject in any detail.
     
  13. Coda

    Coda I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Usually "geomantic" unless it's different in this setting.
     
  14. Mr Zoat

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  15. Tzeentch

    Tzeentch Know what you're doing yet?

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    PAUL: Just so you know, my elf girlfriend is worried that I might be stolen away by a "Tower of Hoeth Hussy", so I want to make it perfectly clear that I happen to be spoken for, okay?

    TECLIS: ....I shall do my best to refrain from throwing myself off the dragonship out of grief for what could have been.

    PAUL: If it makes you feel any better, I don't think it would have worked out between us. You're not exactly my type.

    TECLIS: Favoring looks over personality? How typical.
     
  16. Mquz

    Mquz Versed in the lewd.

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    I’m surprised there haven’t been discussions on GW’s new “no fan animations” policy here. If the emperor had a text to speech device decided to move on to other projects. This seems like such a bad move for marketing.
     
  17. Tzeentch

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    It's certainly possible that, Slann-lethargy aside, the Mage-Priest in question would have likely foreseen that the High Elves would help out with the Waystone Network plan, so it didn't see any pressing need to speak or act.
     
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  18. Someguy Somewhere

    Someguy Somewhere The Critical Fumbler

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    I am aware of the state of TTS and GW's legal choices, and while I'm sure there is a lot to say about Games Workshop and it's treatment of content creators using their IP, I don't think this is the venue for it, unless someone at GW happens to start targeting Mr Zoat for his use of WHFB and 40k universes.

    I don't know if the mods would be treating current day corporate legal discussions under politics or not, but having just waded through threads elsewhere on the topic, it's not likely to be a polite or civil conversation.
     
  19. Threadmarks: Veganism (part 10)
    Mr Zoat

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    1st September 2012
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    They've evacuated, Lantern Grayven.

    I nod to myself as the arena stands begin to fill. The reconnaissance fleet I brought with me just got out of interdiction range, and those who could be saved from the planet below have been. The death toll was still hideous, but it wasn't one hundred percent and that's more than nothing.

    I don't think that Diana has thought this through. I mean, I certainly haven't helped her gaining the necessary mental clarity, but she's pushing ninety. At this point if she hasn't got a better idea of her limits, then that's on her. And of all the people I know, with the exception of Artemis, she's probably best placed to actually pull this off. There's nothing… Other than the severe gastrointestinal distress that comes with a radical dietary change-

    And for a strange moment I relive the distant memory of my return home from university, when I switched from a diet of curry and rice to a more balanced diet and spent a couple of days on the toilet. Huh. Haven't… Thought about that part of my life for a while.

    -that can't be overcome with good planning and tyrannical leadership.

    I walk closer to the balcony to get-

    "Hey breeder, get back to-."

    I pick the woman up by her neck, swing her upside down and then slam her legs against the railing hard enough to snap them sideways, then toss her behind me.

    "A-ah!"

    -a better look at proceedings. Ah, nothing special going on. Astarte's still got her armour and Barda's mega rod, and she's added some sort of bracer-mounted gun. Diana's going with her bracers and lasso. Which is stupid, but she doesn't want to actually kill her aunt…

    Ugh, if she's dedicated to this foolishness, at least she's being true to herself.

    Ah, some sort of blue woman with four ears is checking Astarte's equipment. Diana's just-. Oh, I was thinking of this as a gladiatorial thing, but if this is more like a formal duel…

    I trigger my aero-discs and fly out over the arena, landing next to Diana.

    "Need anything? Better armour? A sword."

    "No."

    "Shoulder rub? Luna doesn't have the right physiology, but Jade said that-."

    She frowns. "No."

    Four-ears stares at me for a moment before Astarte slaps her.

    "That is not Grayven, merely someone who looks like him."

    "Then what is it doing here? It has no standing. It cannot issue a challenge and it isn't a Citizen."

    "Oh, I was planning on offering my service as Diana's second."

    Astarte shakes her head. "You would have to be a Citizen to do that."

    "And how does one become a Citizen? Because if it's single combat, there's an ex-Citizen back there-" I point my right thumb at the stands. "-who needs her leg bones set."

    Diana closes her eyes for a moment. "Grayven."

    "Becoming a Citizen requires that you be one of the hundred strongest women on a planet we recruit from, or to be born to a Citizen and survive to adulthood."

    "Well, tell you what." It's a crude technique, but I walk past Astarte and loom over Ears. "If you don't want me to be her second, then make me leave." Scathing Contempt.

    Her eyes widen slightly, but I don't feel any fear.

    "That's exactly what the-. What Grayven said."

    "We are very alike."

    "It hardly matters." Astarte checks the straps on her armour before nodding. "Once Diana is dead I plan to kill you anyway. Whether you're recognised as her second or not makes no difference."

    I step aside so that I can keep both of them in my field of view.

    "Sure it does! If it's formal, I won't be able to just gun you down with drones again. I'll have to fight you personally, and between you and me?" I shrug. "I'm not that great a pugilist."

    Better than I was before I spent time in the Land of Summer's End, mind-. Oh, that's right. Diana hasn't seen my current level of swordsmanship, has she?

    "No, you will be cut down like the dog you are."

    "You cut down dogs? Why?" I grin. "Do you consider them to be foes on your level?"

    Ears shakes her head. "I take it back. Grayven is no jester."

    "His loss. Diana, you got everything you need?"

    "Yes."

    "Alright then. Have fun."

    Astarte waves off Ears, and she retreats towards the opposite end of the arena. I wait until she's gone a short way, then wave and mirror her action. Right, Diana will either win or she won't. I have to prepare for what happens next. This fleet is a lot bigger than anything that I want anywhere near Vega, even if they weren't going to eat the inhabitants. If Diana loses, I very much doubt that I can slaughter them all before the fleet arrives.

    I land on my balcony, noting with pleasure that the other occupants back away. And Legs is trying to bind her own wounds. Makes sense, given their culture. If only I had an ally to help with these ships.

    "Hey." "Fancy seeing you here."

    I smile as Artemis takes position next to me, leaning against the railings.

    "Hay is for horses, Artemis." "I'm slumming it. The ordnance?"

    "Your girlfriend's a pony." "Ready. Where do you want it?"

    "If you ever feed her, I want to watch." "Target the officers. I want them leaderless. Use whatever you've got left over on technically complex systems. They don't strike me as tech-savvy."

    "Can I? 'cause I didn't exactly have a pony growing up. And those Sheeda-side things weren't really the same." "The fleet's too big."

    "You can ask her. It's honestly never occurred to me to raise the subject." "I know. And I still don't know where Conquest Two is. Not much I can do about it until this farce is over."

    "Citizen."

    A blonde woman with dreadlocks stands at the… Entrance to the otherwise-abandoned balcony, Legs having managed to crawl off somewhere.

    "Leave."

    Artemis vaults over the balcony and disappears in the lower level.

    "And what do you want? Theana, right?"

    "The right to kill you once my cousin falls."

    "Think your mother has you pipped there. Though I'm honestly not fussy. If you're closest, you die first." I shrug and gesture to the arena as Diana throws the first punch. "Want to watch the fight before your world is destroyed?"

    "I suppose I may as well."
     
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    Those are some very important invisitext.
     
  21. Chojin Patriarch

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    For the invisitext impaired, that hidden conversation:
     
  22. Vaermina

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    Diana needs to win faster.

    Cause I want to see all the egg on Renagade's face.
     
  23. Citizen

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    Fine, but let the record show that it was my choice!
     
  24. Darko

    Darko Well worn.

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    'in gaining' or 'gain'

    They are a space faring society, so they may be able to deal with that.

    That was centuries ago.

    Maybe 'can be'

    This was kinda awesome.

    There is also the possibility that killing her aunt will see her be killed.

    The Kindly Ones may exist here, and they do not like kinslaying.

    True.

    Bitch try and stop him.

    She started it!

    And according to Stsword, it's an impressive feat to survive Citizen childhood.

    Showing fear is probably an invitation to be killed in this place.

    Even if you're not Grayven.

    Because she's evil.

    You can't be evil without harming puppies.

    She is a bitch.

    Have some faith in your killing abilities.

    'to me, leaning'

    Kinky.

    Consequences of focusing on being evil.
     
  25. transhumansage

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    how would main-paul handle these people? i mean my god. are they even in main-paul's reality.
     
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    Thanks for that, I'd honestly forgotten to check when I was initially reading through it.
     
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    They most likely are.

    As for handling them, maybe he'll do a repeat of the Citadel.
     
  28. Ngamer11

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    They are. They got mentioned once, but they are low on the priority list. I would guess Paul would just kill them all or maybe maroon them.
     
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    My gods these people need to die.

    I really liked the casual neck toss
     
  30. Chojin Patriarch

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    Though I have to wonder what they'll do with the refugees they managed to save. Resettled on a planet somewhere in the Renegade's Vega demense? I doubt they can safely return to their world, if the Provider snakes go after all living things on it. Kind of hard to survive without a biosphere...

    And I doubt she'd deign to eat anything they'd offer her, knowing from where it came. Certainly, she's got a good chance, especially if she can handle Astarte's godspeech attacks.

    Oof, I feel that pain. Whenever I try a food new to me, there's always that period of your stomach going 'why are you doing this to me, I don't know how to digest this!'

    Ooh, bad idea, honey. I don't think the Renegade's in the mood for...

    ...Right, consider her chastised. Ow. Safe to assume the rest will keep a sensible distance.

    Plus, I don't think she's got time to go collect her good armour, anyway. never mind the whole kinslaying thing, as Darko mentioned. She knows quite well that the Furies, as she knows them, are real and no doubt quite happy to dole out punishment.

    Renegade, I rather think she's got this handled. Last thing she needs is you sticking your nose into her business. Unless things go poorly. Then feel free to save her wondrous ass and gloat. You know you'll want to.

    ...I'm sure you could make a massager construct. Just watch what shape you make it in, Mister 'tentacle ogre'. Otherwise they may decide to keep you.

    Ah, I'm guessing she's seen Grayven-16 before, unlike the mouthy bitch in the stands.

    I would expect four-ears to check Diana's gear too, as a sort of referee. Any subterfuge would likely invalidate the challenge in her favour.

    'Athena's grace, I can't take him anywhere, can I?' is probably what she's thinking. But hey, he's just trying to fit in with the locals. And doing a decent job of it, by their standards.

    Oof, turning the full force of his godly Ego on her? That's got to sting.

    Definitely seen the other fellow up close and personal, then. o_O Fascinating.

    ...You can try. Now that he's prepared for your godspeech, I suspect things would go a littler more evenly.

    Not that he uses his fists much, these days. Mostly the sword that on anyone else would be a compensation display, and the rings.

    Hey, don't insult dogs like that. They're usually good puppers.

    I have to wonder, which one she prefers: Mr Edgelord Conquest, or Mr Comedian Conquest. Acquisition!

    And do try not to die? I'm sure Batman would be rather upset. Not that the Renegade cares that much about the opinion of a man dressed like a bat these days.

    Especially since they probably have some measure of anti-lantern countermeasures. They must have run across the Green Lanterns before sometime... On that note, what the hell is Green Man up to, since last we saw, he was trying to talk at them...

    Oh look, just what you asked for! :p Oh, I do wonder how she knew you needed something?

    Ah, I see she's not been idle. Presumably something set in motion when they found the Citizenry's previous target.

    To be fair, some forms of edible plant are appropriate gifts for Equestrians. Bouquets of tasty flowers in place of a box of chocolates, for example. Hay, though... Would that be the equivalent of giving her a sandwich? :p

    The joy of blundering into a sidequest in the middle of something important, and getting stuck in it because of circumstances.

    My, she's a big one.

    Off to plant some discreet sabotage charges, eh? Handy that her usual green gear lets her blend in here...

    Boy, another one with a hate-on for Grayven's face. Given that she's basically their warrior princess and exemplar of their values, she's presumably read in on a lot of the leadership decisions...

    If only so she can laugh at the challenger's displays of compassion? She seems the sort to underestimate Diana just because she's not a vicious murder-bitch...

    Well, then. Tomorrow, we get to see Diana take on her auntie. Let's hope Diana's ready for the sheer viciousness Astarte is likely to display. On the other hand, she's likely to make a good showing of martial skills for the crowd, so if she wins, she can hopefully drive some reforms through without busting too many heads... ;) Probably not, though.
     
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